First draft feedback

Today we showed our first draft to our class and teachers so they could watch it and give us feedback on how to improve it. As a whole, there were lots of ways we could improve it. One of the most common themes was the cinematography. A lot of the outside shots were shaky as we were doing them handheld because of issues with the ground and the dolly. A lot of our classmates and teachers felt that we would need to re-do these shots using either a dolly, tripod, steadicam or shoulder mount to make it much more stable. We as a group already decided that we would do this after we completed our first draft. Another common theme was to change the ending of the video. The video ends in the recording studio and seems very anti-climatic and slightly boring as there are quite a few of these recording studio shots in the video at the moment. Again we had decided already that we wanted to film at one of the locations we went to for our photo-shoot and include it towards the end. A few of the positives included the performance and lip singing of our main artist. This is something that we noticed, however a few times (especially towards the beginning of shooting) we felt that Jacob didn't know all the words and sometimes wasn't performing them well enough so that the audience would be able to understand what he was saying.

Digipak updated

This is my updated digipak. Its not completely final but its an update to say the least. i have changed the main font for King J and made some of the white text bolder so it can stand out more. I also changed the font on the competition panel for the social media links. Furthermore I have changed the background of the bonus disk to black and white like I did with the main CD. I felt that this makes it look better as originally the main CD stood out and looked out of place compared to the bonus disk.

I have also kept working on my magazine advert.


I have changed this heavily. I changed the main picture to the one it is now and included the front cover of my digipak in the right hand corner. I also included social media links and streaming sites where the album is going to be available.

Plans to re-shoot

As a group we have already decided that we will begin to re-shoot some scenes for our music video. We decided that we should start re-filming in the Christmas holiday as it would give us a lot more time to analyse the scenes we re-film and change it if we need to. We also decided that we will be keeping the party scene as we all agree it looks very good and realistic so there is no need to re-shoot this. However, quite a few of the outside shots are shaky as we were only using the camera handheld as we rushed the first draft slightly. This means we will need to refilm all of these with either a steadicam, shoulder cam, tripod or dolly. We also wanted to add in some additional scenes at one of the locations that we shot our photoshoot at in Thamesmead. This was a big hill that overlooked a lot of the city. We felt this was a very appropriate setting and we really want to use this towards the end of our video.

Reflecting on our first draft

In combination of the feedback from our class and teachers, I felt it would also be good to reflect on our first draft with my own opinion. I felt that our first draft was successful in creating a frame for our group to work on. A lot of the shots were rough shots of what we want the video to look like. As we were also pushed for time, we decided to not focus on the quality of these shots just so that we had the basis of a music video to show our class to get feedback. The only shots our group intend on keeping are the party shots as they came out very well and look very realistic. They were also praised in the feedback. This first draft has been useful for us as it has showed us the importance of scheduling shoots and deciding what equipment we will be using before the day of these shoots.

Music video first draft

This our first draft for our music video. There are many shots that we will come to re film for our final draft but for now we feel this is a good stage to be at.

Production Log Entry 6

Today we filmed the final scene for our first draft. This consisted of a short close up of the same girl who was in the party scene. This shot fits into the lyrics of the song where King J is talking about "the girl he wants". The shot was relatively successful and we will add it into our first draft. When we went back to class we put it all together in our edit and finalised our first draft. We feel quite happy with our first draft but we know there are lots of improvements to be made such as refilming and additional shots. We will start this after we show our first draft to our class.